It seems like an interesting fic, but I'm finding it very difficult to read because of the formatting. Run-on paragraphs, poor sentence structure, that sort of thing. It's giving me a headache.

It could do with an edit.

Okay then...
I haven't been able to really write it/draft/edit/etc because I have alot going on write now....
and I don't find it very important unless I become an author so that's how I write,please don't expect any more or better from me.

It doesn't matter if it's printed in book form or not. You posted your work on the internet. People can read it. People can print it to read offline if they want. It's published.

Also, IMO, if you don't practice good formatting skills NOW, it's going to hurt you later.

If you have a problem with reading it,then why read it at all,much less lecture me?
Why spend your time on something you don't like? But then again,that's just my opinion...